Shop More Submit  Join Login
×

:icondemosthenes-h: More from Demosthenes-H


Featured in Collections

Texts by Daghrgenzeen


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
February 5, 2013
File Size
480 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
391
Favourites
27 (who?)
Comments
42
×
 I kiss infinity
Her lips are full
        Of empty

                  They're not chains
                   Or pitied shelter
                     For lost angels

                                           The stars
                                        Are our song
                                          Swept away
A view of the stars in unpolluted light inspired me to write this.

You should try looking up sometimes.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconpalesile:
palesile Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And thennnn suddenly insufficient.

Lol the second you said "us poets," I was like well yip-dee-do let's check out this mutha. Little did I know what I'd find, you spectacular thing you. Considering that the night sky is one of my favorite things in the universe, this touched my heart because it feels exactly like what I've always wished I could explain it as. Took my breath away.

'falls on floor'
Reply
:icondemosthenes-h:
Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
Insufficient? pffft. 'waves hand dismissively' I fell in love with you a few poems ago, lets not undersell yourself ;)

And the night sky is arguably the most romantic thing ever. Call me a giant vagina all you want, but I fall in awe of the universe when I see it through stained glass right above me.

Need some help up? ;) lawl
Reply
:iconpalesile:
palesile Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I do, I do haha

It doesn't make you a giant vagina! You see it the way it's supposed to be seen. It's a special ability, you know, not everyone has it. ;P
Reply
:icondemosthenes-h:
Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
... I feel thoroughly 'special', trust me haha ;)

You've got it as well I'd say ...

YOU JUST GOTTA BELIEVE 'throws arms in the air'
Reply
:iconpalesile:
palesile Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
PRAISE THE LORD HALLELUJAH
Reply
:icondemosthenes-h:
Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
You know, this happens to me more often than what would be considered normal.

I should have been a preacher.

So how long have you been writing for? :D
Reply
:iconpalesile:
palesile Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahaha can't tell if that's a good thing or just so unfortunate..

I've been writing since I learned how to write. I dint want to sound like I'm trying to brag but its just always something I was really good at. I remember in fourth grade my teacher liked to have us write stories quite a bit (not just about our day but stories with creative prompts)... I enjoyed it so much. I was always one of the best. And if I wasn't, it fueled me to be better. It stuck with me for all the years I've been alive. I love it a lot.

What about you, sir?
Reply
:icondemosthenes-h:
Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
I got told when I was roughly 10ish that I looked like Lord Byron. I googled him, found that he was not only a poet; but women wanted his babies because of the fact he wrote poetry.

I have been writing ever since. rofl. ;D

Obviously my work resembles something of a beat poet now, but the romantic influences are still there. And now I write and read poetry for the sake of writing and reading it, rather than to impress 10 year old girls.
Reply
(1 Reply)
:iconprettyflour:
prettyflour Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique that you requested!

What a beautiful poem! I continue to be a fan a short poetry- just a few words that say a lot.

This poem has lots going for it. The way you've structured it gives it a very visual appeal. The way the words shifts to the right lends a sense of progression without even having to read it. The words themselves are simple and beautiful- you're imagery is lovely!

And I love your inspiration! Not long ago I moved out to the country and light pollution is almost nonexistent around here. I'll never forget how my daughter noticed the difference of the sky/stars. She was fascinated by how bright the stars are... so I find this poem so incredibly relatable.

So nicely done. Great work!
Reply
:icondemosthenes-h:
Demosthenes-H Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
<3 thank you for your kind kind words

You're going to have to scrape me off the floor, you've flattered me into a pancake with this critique ;D
Reply
Add a Comment: